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Post by sugarrush on Aug 19, 2009 20:12:34 GMT -5
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Post by keyblader110 on Aug 22, 2009 18:51:01 GMT -5
Ok Teach Im ready!!
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Post by sugarrush on Aug 23, 2009 22:36:33 GMT -5
*stabs* XD i told u i would stab ur post! XDXD
*ahem* but anyways! XD can you hmm... write out a simple five sentence/paragraph of something random for me? i want to see how you are with grammar/word choice/imagination, etc.. before we actually get too in depth with the actual stuff that rp's demand. ok? if too hard.. just spam something up.. >.<
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Post by keyblader110 on Aug 23, 2009 22:45:47 GMT -5
Like saying I do such and such a thing......like: Amaie walks softly across the grass. She looks up into the big blue sky wondering. "I dont see the reason Im here" She thought to herself. She turns slightly to settle down and lies on the grass.
like that?
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Post by sugarrush on Aug 24, 2009 22:27:33 GMT -5
[/color] yep. ^^ and now... hmm... parts that are highlighted red above are things that some people like to be picky about. first red item: you don't need to put both 'wondering' and 'she thought to herself' in the same sentance. they both mean the same thing when put in the right context. but the first word may confuse people as it might imply that she's moving around, and not thinking to herself. XD then the next part, if she is indeed thinking to herself, u need to Italize the words she thinks. Otherwise, again, people tend to get annoyed/confused. this is how they look by the way... XD *=Second: the sentence didn't seem right. if you were going to go that route it might've been better to go like this: "She turns slightly to lay down on the ground." XDXDXD if i was too harsh on that let me know! but spelling/grammar seem to be the number one thing that bugs people, so that's what we're going to try to work on for now, k? ^^
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Post by keyblader110 on Aug 24, 2009 22:48:26 GMT -5
*sigh* ok I see so like: Amaie walks softly across the grass. She looks up into the big blue sky sorrowfuly. "I dont see the reason Im here" She thinks to herself. She turns slightly to lay down on the ground.
Right? I'll never get this.......
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Post by sugarrush on Aug 25, 2009 20:31:54 GMT -5
*sigh* ok I see so like: Amaie walks softly across the grass. She looks up into the big blue sky sorrowfuly. " I dont see the reason Im here" She thinks to herself. She turns slightly to lay down on the ground. Right? I'll never get this....... better! ^^ it seems that we've got some basic's down already! ^^ we can alway's check up on spelling/grammar as we continue along! next, i need u to add some.. oh.. feeling i this. What i mean, is the senses. Touch, smell, sight (like duh teach XD) taste, hearing. Like, when she goes to lay down, she can feel the soft breeze upon her skin, and/or whatever the grass feels like. Know what i mean?
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Post by keyblader110 on Aug 25, 2009 20:36:40 GMT -5
Yeah I understand like : As she laid there she feels a cool breeze go cross her face. The cold slighly stings her eyes. She shivers softly from the chill.
that?
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Post by sugarrush on Aug 25, 2009 22:15:33 GMT -5
good. ^^ we're getting somewhere now! now, can you take the first part, and this part and string them together for one cohesive paragraph? and oh the red letters were spelling mistakes! XD just like a school paper, try to watch out for that stuff. People don't like to see TOO many mistakes, hence why they always ask for that stuff to be somewhat good. XDXD if u pass the next part, i next we'll tackle a template and then just work on other stuff on the way, K?
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Post by keyblader110 on Aug 25, 2009 22:24:38 GMT -5
Amaie walks softly across the grass. She looks up into the big blue sky sorrowfuly. "I dont see the reason Im here" She thinks to herself. She turns slightly to lay down on the ground. As she laid there she feels a cool breeze go across her face. The cold slightly stings her eyes. She shivers softly from the chill.
Pretty much like that?
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