dreamerx
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Post by dreamerx on Jul 15, 2010 1:40:13 GMT -5
Done, I should have known that man was Jeremiah. Whatever, past is past.
Now, I am waiting for the next session.
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Post by UsagiOkami on Jul 16, 2010 12:47:19 GMT -5
*shakes head* Jeremy didn't "call" to you, he waved.
And please stop editing your past posts it confuses me to no end when I think there is no responses and then I find out that there is lol.
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dreamerx
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Post by dreamerx on Jul 17, 2010 1:09:46 GMT -5
If he didn't "call", and did wave, then how in heaven did he notice Jeremiah? He was diving into to the world of deep thoughts, thinking of his girlfriend(yes).
Ok, I will stop editing. I will always make new posts, like this one, so I need teh next lesson(or homework)
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Post by UsagiOkami on Jul 17, 2010 11:57:59 GMT -5
I don't know how he noticed him but the fact of the matter is that he did. So repost with the fixing because we aren't yet done with character interaction just yet.
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dreamerx
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Post by dreamerx on Jul 17, 2010 13:19:51 GMT -5
I don't know how he noticed him but the fact of the matter is that he did. So repost with the fixing because we aren't yet done with character interaction just yet. You are confusing me. What about post #21? He noticed him when that man was calling him! Oh wait... that would be PPing... now that made sense. Clive, heard a man in the stable(npc, no?), calling him. He stepped down the wooden ladder, the ladders were old enough to break creaking sound. Stepped on the grass ground of the barracks training grounds. Turning his body away from the ladder, facing a man, he did not recognize his face. Clive stopped for a brief moment, then he walked up to the man. Both of the eyes crossing(Clive's perspective, wouldn't it?) one another, as he walked up to the man, he uttered a "Hello", and asked the man if he was the one to be escorted.(this is the part where the other RPer reply, no?)
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Post by UsagiOkami on Jul 23, 2010 12:37:33 GMT -5
Very good! Correct on all points! A little bit on the short side but still good. It helps to add some thought into a conversation post as it lengthens it as well as adds more depth to the characters actions.
Jeremy watched as the Mage walked over towards him, and although he was pleased that he might have someone to talk to for a bit, he still couldn't shake the apprehension of actually talking to another Mage since he had known so few in his life.
As the other Mage walked up and said hello he then asked if he was the one to be escorted. Jeremy couldn't imagine why a weather Mage would need escorting in the first place, and he was sure that his boss would have told him if he was going somewhere so he imagined there was a mixup.
"Hi there," Jeremy said pleasantly. "No I don't think so, I'm just a weather Mage is all." He said in answer to the others mans question. "My name is Jeremy, pleased to meet you." He said putting forth his hand to shake. He wondered who the other man was in terms of Mage as opposed to person. With so many different jobs for Mages he never knew what anyone specialized in anymore.
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